With all the other projects I have right now, I think that if I want to keep writing, I need to set a time again each day to do so. Once I have a goal, I will write about it. Until then.
"Dance with Words!"
A discussion of the things I write, learn, and discover.
Wednesday, June 26, 2013
Torn
Saturday, May 25, 2013
Over the last few months I haven't written a lot, but I have undertaken a couple of different activities to help improve my writing.
For starters, I took a class offered by Community Ed here in DesMoines in order to begin the process of familiarizing myself with the YA/Middle Grade scene in the city. This class was mostly review from prior classes and conferences that I have attended. However, it was helpful to be reminded! Plus I got to meet some of DesMoines' writers and found out about DAWG (DesMoines Area Writer's Group), which I have attended once and found that it would be nice to attend again in the future. I hope to go to the next meeting this week. The teachers of the class also suggested we read books about writing, so I found a book at the library and began reading it. This was probably more helpful than the class, and I will likely look it over again in the future.
Also, I have been trying to read more, not just for pleasure but to analyze the story elements of the story. Recently, I read halfway through a book, but the story wasn't compelling enough for me to want to keep reading. The voice of the character initially caught my interest; I enjoyed the author's style. However, the reason I put the book down was because the main character and her main love interest weren't original enough (think of all the stories where the girl falls in love with a boy who is already taken) and the main character behaved in a way at times that didn't seem realistic to me. What it boiled down to for me was that I didn't like either of them, and I didn't care about them. Especially not the guy she was in love with; he just seemed like the macho man with good looks.
This week, I finished a book. The author did a great job developing her world and used each scene to help develop the overall plot. However, there were many things she did that weakened her story. First, in only a few scenes, she abruptly switched perspectives away from the main character; the first time this happened, the perspective change was completely unnecessary to the overall plot. Also, it happened so rarely that when it did happen, I was thrown off. Second, character development for the main character was weak; as I read through the book, it was hard for me to describe what the main characters were like. Third, the ending was disappointing; the main character did very little to solve the ultimate problem she walked herself into; instead, all the side characters, including an adult, stepped in to save the day.
Now, I've started reading another book. So far, the pretense of the story has caught me. But already, I am picking out areas where the story could have been improved: cut out the prologue; cut out the extra narrative and dialogue scenes that bog down the story; imagery is great except when you're being overloaded with it
I ponder the pros and cons of these stories as I read them with the knowledge that my own writing needs a lot of work, and there's a reason these books are published. Lately, I have been working on a serious revision of one of the books I finished, trying to apply the things I have learned about character development and plot. It has been fun to looker closer at plot and character and revise scenes to make a stronger story. Right now I am closely looking at each scene to see how it supports both the character arch of the main character as well as the overall plot. By doing this, I feel that I have a stronger story. Now, once done, all I have to do rewrite and revise and edit.
For starters, I took a class offered by Community Ed here in DesMoines in order to begin the process of familiarizing myself with the YA/Middle Grade scene in the city. This class was mostly review from prior classes and conferences that I have attended. However, it was helpful to be reminded! Plus I got to meet some of DesMoines' writers and found out about DAWG (DesMoines Area Writer's Group), which I have attended once and found that it would be nice to attend again in the future. I hope to go to the next meeting this week. The teachers of the class also suggested we read books about writing, so I found a book at the library and began reading it. This was probably more helpful than the class, and I will likely look it over again in the future.
Also, I have been trying to read more, not just for pleasure but to analyze the story elements of the story. Recently, I read halfway through a book, but the story wasn't compelling enough for me to want to keep reading. The voice of the character initially caught my interest; I enjoyed the author's style. However, the reason I put the book down was because the main character and her main love interest weren't original enough (think of all the stories where the girl falls in love with a boy who is already taken) and the main character behaved in a way at times that didn't seem realistic to me. What it boiled down to for me was that I didn't like either of them, and I didn't care about them. Especially not the guy she was in love with; he just seemed like the macho man with good looks.
This week, I finished a book. The author did a great job developing her world and used each scene to help develop the overall plot. However, there were many things she did that weakened her story. First, in only a few scenes, she abruptly switched perspectives away from the main character; the first time this happened, the perspective change was completely unnecessary to the overall plot. Also, it happened so rarely that when it did happen, I was thrown off. Second, character development for the main character was weak; as I read through the book, it was hard for me to describe what the main characters were like. Third, the ending was disappointing; the main character did very little to solve the ultimate problem she walked herself into; instead, all the side characters, including an adult, stepped in to save the day.
Now, I've started reading another book. So far, the pretense of the story has caught me. But already, I am picking out areas where the story could have been improved: cut out the prologue; cut out the extra narrative and dialogue scenes that bog down the story; imagery is great except when you're being overloaded with it
I ponder the pros and cons of these stories as I read them with the knowledge that my own writing needs a lot of work, and there's a reason these books are published. Lately, I have been working on a serious revision of one of the books I finished, trying to apply the things I have learned about character development and plot. It has been fun to looker closer at plot and character and revise scenes to make a stronger story. Right now I am closely looking at each scene to see how it supports both the character arch of the main character as well as the overall plot. By doing this, I feel that I have a stronger story. Now, once done, all I have to do rewrite and revise and edit.
Wednesday, December 5, 2012
Folktale
One more post for today! Wow, twice in one day. The unit I taught combined reading folktales, learning about conflict and theme, and writing. The students were to write a folktale, and many of them did a very good job--probably better than the one I wrote. However, for your reading pleasure, here is my folktale:
Squirrel’s
Rushed Day
Not
so long ago, in a grove of oak
trees along the ridge of a hill, Squirrel dwelt with his family. Since Squirrel had stayed up late the night
before, he snoozed
all morning and gave himself little time to get ready for the day. It was harvest time, and Head Squirrel needed
help gathering nuts. The more he
gathered, the greater the likelihood he’d get a bonus!
Mama
Squirrel had baked
all morning to prepare
him and his brothers and sisters a scrumptious meal. They
all sat together, laughing, and enjoying the tasty nut bread.
“Sit down and eat with us,” Mama Squirrel said.
But
Squirrel just grabbed an apple wedge and said, “Sorry. Gotta go.”
Mama
Squirrel watched him go, shaking her head.
She uttered, “He’s soon going to be hungry.”
Squirrel dashed down the steep hill. When he reached the black road, he rushed
across it and almost got hit by the silver monster that roared past.
As
Squirrel scurried across the open green, his best friend the Mole called
out. “Squirrel! I found a fabulous treasure!
I dug a hole and there it is, but I am not strong enough to pull it
out. Can you help me?”
Squirrel
paused just for a second and then ran backwards. He called out. “I am way too busy right now. Maybe later.”
Without
waiting to hear Mole’s response, Squirrel leapt down a gradual slope and reached the
forest of acorns. Head Squirrel waited
with his collection bags. “Bring back
two hundred, and I’ll send you home with a bag full.”
“That
won’t even be hard.” Squirrel climbed,
leapt, and gathered nut after nut after nut.
He was doing very well. He could
just imagine what he trade the nuts for.
First he’d meet up with Mouse at the Rabbit’s Cool Down, just like
they’d planned, and he would get them both a Raspberry Juicy. He’d be the one getting the drinks this time
instead of bumming off one from Mouse!
The
faster he went, the faster he would be done, and the faster he would get there
and surprise Mouse.
But
as the day went on, he got hungrier and weaker.
Still, he tried to go as fast as he could, and he’d almost gathered his
two hundred nuts and was dreaming of that Juicy when, all of the sudden, he
made a bad leap, lost his footing, and dropped his bag. It fell far down to the ground below
him. The nuts scattered and rolled all
over.
[Coming
out from under fallen trees and thorn bushes,
chipmunks attacked! With evil giggles, they seized the nuts, the product of all
his hard work. “No! You can’t take
those!” Squirrel screamed.
As nut after nut was stolen, Squirrel watched the
calamity from above. It had taken him a
moment to regain his balance. Now that
he had his footing again, Squirrel scampered down the tree trunk, shouting,
“Stop! Those are mine! Stop nasty villains! Thieves!”
“Smelly butthead!” a chipmunk yelled back. Then he laughed, “Hahahaha” and ran off with
the rest of his companions.
Squirrel chased after them, but he soon lost sight of
all of the rascals. Plus, he was so
hungry. He didn’t have any more strength
left in him to track down the nasty critters.]
How
he despised chipmunks! They were
the most obnoxious creatures in the whole world.
Too
tired and too hungry to prolong his labors, Squirrel found Head Squirrel
and gave him back the sack. “I’m sorry,”
he said. “Chipmunks stole all my nuts.”
Head
Squirrel shook his head. “Then I can’t
reward you. Come back tomorrow.”
Worn out, Squirrel ventured to find Mouse at
Rabbit’s Cool Down. She waited, looking
pretty with a flower in her ear.
“It’s
getting so late, I almost thought you weren’t coming.”
Squirrel
shrugged his shoulders and said, “Chipmunks stole all my nuts today.”
“Oh. I’m sorry!” she said. “Let me get us some drinks. Maybe that will make you feel better.”
The
Raspberry Juicy was delicious and refreshing, but as Mouse chattered about her
day, all Squirrel could think about was how comfortable and cozy his nest
sounded. This day had tuckered him out. And nothing good had come out of it. He just wanted to sleep. Finally, Mouse got frustrated and said, “You
aren’t even listening to me. I’ll find
someone else to hang out with.” She
scampered off.
Frustrated
and exhausted, Squirrel headed home. On
his way there, Squirrel passed by the home of Mole’s family. Squirrel’s family was there as well. They were having a party, and no one had
invited him. Mole’s treasure turned out
to be a large golden coin that he had exchanged with Goose for some food. Squirrel’s younger brother had helped him get
it out, which was why the Squirrel family was there.
Depressed that Mole had
left him out, Squirrel returned
home, prepared for
bed, and rolled up in his nest high in the tree. What a miserable day he’d had. He would have to do something to make tomorrow
better.
He
would start by getting up early and eating breakfast with his family—that is if
Mama Squirrel made him any. Then he
would not only get a good meal, he’d have spent some time with his family. If Mole needed help, he would have more compassion
and help him. When he gathered nuts, he
would slow down and not be in a rush. He
would then have the extra nuts to share with his family and friends! Finally, he wouldn’t be so grumpy if he met
up with Mouse again. He would make it up
to her tomorrow so that she didn’t run off to hang out with someone else.
Feeling repentant
and hopeful for a better day tomorrow, Squirrel finally fell asleep.
Moral of the Story: Enjoy every moment
so you don’t leave behind a pile of regrets.
What motivates people to change?
This is what I wrote for an example expository essay. My students are working on writing a Person-by-Person essay about people who were motivated to change. This isn't a star paper. I discovered my writing skills are a little rusty!
Teens Motivated to Change Themselves and
the World
In
the book Real Kids, Real Stories, and Real Change, there are many
stories about individuals who faced difficulties in their lives and were
motivated to change. Three of these
people were Mawi Asgedom, Malika Sanders, and Izidor Runkel. Each experienced challenges early in his or
her life. Mawi’s family moved from
Ethiopia in the middle of a war and had to learn to survive in America. Growing up in Alabama, Malika saw how she was
not treated equally because of her color.
Finally, Izidor was given a second chance at life when an American
couple adopted him from a Romanian orphanage.
Each of these people could have blamed their circumstances for their
poor quality of life. However, Mawi,
Malika, and Izidor were motivated to change by their circumstances, not only
making life better for themselves but for others as well.
After
fleeing war in Ethiopia, Mawi Asgedom faced many difficulties in America. Two of these challenges included fights with
those who bullied him and failure at school.
Wanting him to be successful in America, Mawi’s father encouraged him
not to fight and to do well in school. However,
Mawi wasn’t motivated to succeed until his brother was killed. When this happened, Mawi realized how
precious life was and decided to change.
In order to do better, Mawi began to work harder in school. As a result, he did well in high school, got
a scholarship to Harvard, and later spoke at graduation. Afterwards, Mawi became a motivational
speaker, using his own experiences to inspire others. Learning the value of life from his brother’s
death, Mawi was motivated to change and is now helping others succeed.
The
challenge Malika Sanders had to overcome in her life was racism. She grew up in a town where the mayor was
racist and where the school segregated students into advanced and remedial
classes based on color. When she was
young, Malika wanted to stand up against inequality. This desire gave her the motivation to change
both her school and her town. She
organized efforts that not only changed how students were placed in classes at
school, but also succeeded at sending the mayor out of power. Now, because of Malika’s motivation to
change, students are placed in classes according to ability, and democracy is
stronger for everyone in her town of Selma, Alabama.
As
an orphan, Izidor Runkel struggled to overcome the negative effects of living
in a Romanian orphanage. There he faced
neglect, unsanitary conditions, abuse, and the deaths of his friends. When he was adopted by an American couple, a
lot changed for Izidor. However, things
didn’t get better right away for Izidor.
He had a hard time trusting his new parents and also had to go through
six operations to fix his crippled leg. However, he finally accepted their love
and persevered through the operations that allowed him to walk again. Recognizing how his parents had given him a
chance at a happy life, at fifteen, Izidor began efforts to help other orphans
in Romania by speaking across America to make others aware of the orphan’s
plight. He eventually moved back to
Romania to be able to help the orphans even better. Izidor overcame the difficulties of his own
life, not allowing the challenges of his past to keep him down, and then worked
to ensure the happiness of all the orphans he left behind.
Throughout
the world, people grow up in difficult circumstances. Mawi, Izidor, and Malika each faced problems
from a young age and could have remained in their harsh environments, or, at
the least, blamed their unhappiness on them.
However, all three were motivated to change. Mawi was motivated by the death of his
brother. Malika was motivated by the inequality in her school. Izidor was motivated when he recognized the
gift of life his adopted parents had given him.
All three were able to create a better life for themselves. As they did so, they recognized that others still
lived in those same harsh circumstances that they once lived in. Recognizing that change can happen, they didn’t
stop at change for themselves but continued doing what they could to make life
better for others.
Monday, April 30, 2012
Books I want to read this summer
The Gray Wolf Throne by Cinda Chima Williams
The Glass Swallow by Julia Golding
Forging the Sword by Hilari Bell
...
let's start there
The Glass Swallow by Julia Golding
Forging the Sword by Hilari Bell
...
let's start there
QAR: Practice in Writing Questions
For "The House in the Wood" which appears in "The Pink Fairy Book":
The questions I came up with were:
Right There: What type of animals did the old man have?
Think and Search: What makes the third daughter different from her sisters?
Author & Me: Why should we be kind not only to people but also to animals?
On My Own: Why would a wicked witch curse a prince?
For "Uraschimataro and the Turtle" which appears in "The Pink Fairy Book":
Right There: How many years had Uraschimataro been gone?
Think and Search: Why did the princess not want Uraschimataro to leave? Why did he leave?
Author & Me: What things sometimes keeps someone from keeping a promise?
On My Own: What would it be like to find a palace under the sea?
The questions I came up with were:
Right There: What type of animals did the old man have?
Think and Search: What makes the third daughter different from her sisters?
Author & Me: Why should we be kind not only to people but also to animals?
On My Own: Why would a wicked witch curse a prince?
For "Uraschimataro and the Turtle" which appears in "The Pink Fairy Book":
Right There: How many years had Uraschimataro been gone?
Think and Search: Why did the princess not want Uraschimataro to leave? Why did he leave?
Author & Me: What things sometimes keeps someone from keeping a promise?
On My Own: What would it be like to find a palace under the sea?
Friday, April 27, 2012
Writing Prompt: The Program
Five minute write:
Clarence opened the program and scanned through the names to find Jared's. A sick feeling settled in his stomach when he saw that his brother's name was towards the end. He glanced up at the clock. It was almost seven already, and he was supposed to meet Nancy at 7:30. But he'd promised Jared he would come to this. He'd forgotten when he set up the date for Nancy. And when he realized there was a conflict, he hoped that Jared would be one of the first ones in the recital. Then he could do both. But...it didn't seem like there was the time. Maybe he could talk to Jared's teacher and convince him to put Jared first! But that was an unlikely proposal because the instructor was now getting up to welcome everyone. So either he stood up Jared, or called Nancy and canceled the date.
He'd much rather go out with Nancy then sit through two hours of violin and piano.
Jared sneaked in and sat by him. "Great you made it! I was almost worried I wasn't going to."
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